Wednesday, February 29, 2012

Here's an issue for you...it's called a thesis statement.

Man, I HATE doing thesis statements before I start my actual essay! But here ya go:


Although it may sometimes make conversation more convenient, electronic communication has greatly reduced our society's social skills because people spend more time conversing technologically than verbally.


Uh...the wording sounds awkward to me. Any suggestions???

3 comments:

  1. I would take out "it may sometimes" and change the last phrase to something a little more simple. Otherwise it sounds great, and it sounds like a great topic.

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  2. “Although it may make conversation more convenient, electronic communication has greatly reduced our society's social skills because people spend more time conversing through technologically than verbally.” Great topic and good luck!

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  3. I agree... I do my thesis statement in the middle of writing my essay sometimes. It sounds like a good topic.

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